Thursday, 14 January 2016

Week 2- The Bald Burger Bun

As I joined the queue I realised that one of my burger buns had no seeds on top. So when I reached the front of the line I made a complaint about it and the cashier said, "why do you have to be so fussy?"So when I got home that night, my heart sunk like a rock in a swimming pool.I was cooking my burgers when suddenly out of the BALD BURGER BUN came a mutant burger which spat SEEDS! it very very very very almost ambushed the whole city. I was very very determined to fix it but how?

Josh, 3B

3 comments:

  1. Well done Josh, an amusing and fun piece of writing. You have used a good range of punctuation and I like how you have left it on a cliffhanger. How are you going to fix it?

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  2. Well done Josh, an amusing and fun piece of writing. You have used a good range of punctuation and I like how you have left it on a cliffhanger. How are you going to fix it?

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  3. Dear Josh
    I think your idea is very imaginative. About having a bald burger bun.

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