Jack ran in the direction his mum was pointing, but he couldn’t see any toiletries. Whilst his eyes hurriedly scanned the shelves his attention was caught by a huge TV. “Awesome!” whispered Jack and immediately he drifted away from the shampoo and into a world of his own…
Would he make it back to the checkouts in time?
Would he make it back to the checkouts in time?
Peter 5W
Great work Peter! I really like your use of a rhetorical question to add suspense at the end of your story. Well done for making the story very relatable and a life like situation.
ReplyDeleteCould you try to include the phrase 'as i joined the queue' within the story to set the scene of being at the checkouts?
Miss Jenkins